My wish, with my fiction, is never to harm or cause a traumatic flashback, but rather to express empathy, teach, show, embolden, entertain, and/or, when appropriate, enrage or frighten. That said, be aware that this microfiction story contains a disturbing aspect of physical (child) abuse and raises aspects of sexism and rape. If these are triggers for you, you might want to skip reading this.
WHAT DOESN’T DESERT HER
Genre: Realistic, literary fiction
WORD COUNT: 100
Lorraine stands at the sink fronting purposefully leviathan window panes, mind muted by the task of sanitizing everything. The scene outside beckons her backward.
Philip’s hands choke. “Yer not my real sister. Yer a-dop-ted.” She feels the words going ’round and ’round, cords across her neck, binding her chest, encircling her belly, and twisting into a terminus snaking her legs.
Once, she shows momma Blanche the marks. “Boys can be rough. Just don’t let ’em touch you there.” She points.
Suddenly self-aware, Lorraine reaches for ceaseless drops, bending the fog around her body.
Wishing for comfort but feeling only gauze.
Hello. I’ve been away from actively blogging for awhile (but still writing and submitting and waiting and hoping!), and then I returned, oh, about two weeks ago and was struck by severe pagefright, after hammering out about four different posts, two fiction/poetry and two evergreen/nonfiction. Then I saw Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ weekly Friday Fictioneers prompt and this microfiction story clamped onto me and wouldn’t let go (and so I moved beyond the blank page). I hope I’ve succeeded in presenting a decent story that makes you feel something. Thank you kindly for reading my very short and disturbing story; I am more than happy to receive feedback on it as well, and will make every attempt to do the same for other FF stories.
In the meanwhile, please take a look at the other Friday Fictioneers’ postings and provide constructive feedback whenever you can; also note that Rochelle’s newest book, From Silt and Ashes, is available now via Amazon. I have her short story collection—This, That, and Sometimes the Other—and do readily recommend it, so I’m sure the novel will be similarly well written and moving.