100 Words on Saturday: A Write Tribe Challenge

Well, it’s submission 100 Words on Saturday - Write TribeSaturday, folks. I found another challenge with which to sharpen my writing on a whetstone of words (try saying that fast). This one is the Write Tribe 100-word challenge (the 2014-5 incarnation). Give it a go, fiction f(r)iends! As always, feedback will feed you back—in other words, your comments are appreciated and I’ll do my best to reciprocate.

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Genre: Microfiction

A doppelgänger of the mind

©Leigh Ward-Smith, 2014

As Melanie Yelton trained cornflower eyes on the microwave carousel, she tried to ignore the coil slipping closer to her sternum.

Silently, like many times before, she logged the revolutions of the russet, pirouetting oblongly. 265.

Giggles cartwheeled down the hallway, which made her bring the blood.

When the time comes, how do I tell her about you? Melanie chewed a lip as she drummed hangnail-ragged fingers in a 3-3-3-2-2 pattern. My constant companion. My damaged doppelgänger.

The familiar viper of fear sliding through her ribs told her that soon it would be time to check the window latches again.

Crotalus basiliscus by Dr. Holger Krisp of Ulm, Germany. This photo was obtained via Creative Commons Attribution 3.0 Unported license.

Crotalus basiliscus (Mexican west coast rattlesnake) by Dr. Holger Krisp of Ulm, Germany. This photo was obtained via Creative Commons Attribution 3.0 Unported license.

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30 thoughts on “100 Words on Saturday: A Write Tribe Challenge

    • Wish I could answer that question, Andy. I just found the challenge a day or so ago, so I’m not sure if any continuity has to exist from challenge post to challenge post–I’m thinking no. They have a Wednesday, Friday, and Saturday challenge, it looks like. Good question, though. Let me know what you find out!

    • Thank you so much for your encouraging words and for visiting my blog, Sulekha. I love your story as well–it really hooks me with the lead, from “The veil of forced cheer” onward. Hope to read more of your blog here shortly, and thank you again!

    • Thank you so much for visiting, Geeta. It’s great to get reader feedback that the “mental snake” worked to full effect. Oh, yes, I really enjoyed the Write Tribe experience; I’ll definitely be revisiting and re-reading. Best regards!

    • Thank you, M.K. Your comments are much appreciated; I just might have to explore Melanie’s character a bit more to see what she tells me about herself. Who knows, maybe she’ll go in a different direction than I first surmised. Best regards to you, and happy writing!

    • Thank you for reading & commenting, Shilpa. You are very kind! You never know . . . Melanie just might make a second appearance. She was an interesting character to write. I’ll just have to wait until she wants to give me some further direction. 🙂

    • Thank you so much for stopping by, Neelam. I’m glad you enjoyed the suspense of the piece; as I wrote it, I was hoping I was able to convey that sense of the “you” not necessarily being a human–and to draw the reader along in the dark, sort of fumbling along with the character. In any case, I appreciate your comment and your readership. My best regards to you! 🙂

    • Thank you for the warm welcome, Bhavya! I, too, have done some work in advertising–I’ve done freelance copywriting work–and find I love to return to a different kind of creative writing myself rather than pushing brands and consumerism. I’m so glad you have the artistic outlet of your blog (as I have mine!). Happy writing and best wishes.

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